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You made me smile and laugh
You made me want to be better
To run farther,
To love harder
You made me love to fall
I wanted to be the one to hold you
I want to tell you I love you
I want to kiss you in the rain
Sometimes it burns
Every time I think of you
The pain, the boredom they stop
And suddenly I'd be content to lie still for awhile
If only I could feel your heart against mine.
I'm not a good person,
And this isn't a good poem,
I don't always speak the truth,
But this time it's true:
I love you.
Fuck I actually wrote her a love poem
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:iconlovemereally15:
lovemereally15 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
when you said "fuck I actually wrote her a love poem" I wanted to say to u in person "love makes you do crazy things"
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fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks hun :)
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:iconlovemereally15:
lovemereally15 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
no probz!.
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TheRandomThings Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
omg thats soo sweet i bet she loved it! its one of the better ones ive read in a while <3 so cute lol
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fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
She never saw it.  That was sort of the whole point.
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NinaV521 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013
Very Sweet :)
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:iconfireyfreedom:
fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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scooby25611 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love this. Made me "Awww". It's really a beautiful piece of writing. ^^
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:iconfireyfreedom:
fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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scooby25611 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome. ^^
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Denisaiko Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my Gosh, may I use your poem for a song I'm composing? I am making an album with songs composed by me on poems taken from deviantart and I will be happy to give you credit on it, and maybe royalties, if the cd sells.
Cheers!
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fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Of course! I'd be honored. IF you make the song may I have a recording so I can listen?
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Denisaiko Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Sure! Just send me your e-mail address in a note. :)
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Ashthaniel Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012
This poem is so sweet. :3
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:iconfireyfreedom:
fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks ^^
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Ashthaniel Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012
You're welcome :d
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Skullcandy1995 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Student
Love this one .....
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:iconfireyfreedom:
fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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Skullcandy1995 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012  Student
You welcome ;)
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:iconusakokoro:
UsaKokoro Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2012  Student Digital Artist
It's adorable. ^^ I hope it helped her to understand you...
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:iconfireyfreedom:
fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
She never did read it... oh well, it was good to write ^^ Thanks!
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lovemereally15 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
why didn't she? If you wrote this to me I'd read this b4 bed and when I wake up
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fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I never showed it to her.  She'd already moved on, so I let her go.  ^^ But I'm glad you like it.
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lovemereally15 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I been in your shoes b4..i liked this guy once cuz I thought he was the same as when we wore younger but he change and be came somewhat..like a stranger...and I couldn't like him anymore it just wasn't in me
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UsaKokoro Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Of course. ^^
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Master-Chief13 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012
it's beautiful
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:iconfireyfreedom:
fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks ^^
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enzerushin Featured By Owner May 28, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
hahaha, this is pretty good! o u o
And you have to deal with it ; You wrote a love poem. B )
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fireyfreedom Featured By Owner May 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I know !!!! but oh well, it helped me move on more or less
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:iconenzerushin:
enzerushin Featured By Owner May 31, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Awn, well, all for the best then ? o u o
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fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Yup
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Elby-manga-addicted Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2011  Student Digital Artist
I think its a beautiful poem!!
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:iconfireyfreedom:
fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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Elby-manga-addicted Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2011  Student Digital Artist
you're welcome :aww:
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und3adpoet Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
this is so beautiful :iconawwwplz:
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:iconfireyfreedom:
fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
thanks!
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und3adpoet Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
np ^_^
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EpickBlonde666 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Honestly sweet. Whoever she is, she should be happy.
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fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, I hope she is, but she'll probably never read this.
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kittiasher Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010
You are a good person, sweeting, don't ever doubt that!!! And it is a good poem, by the way! Now stop kicking yourself!
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:iconfireyfreedom:
fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
thanks sweetheart! but kicking myself has its merits!
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:iconkittiasher:
kittiasher Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010
You kinky freak!!!
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:iconfireyfreedom:
fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
o.0 that was NOT what I meant... but now that you mention it..
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:iconkittiasher:
kittiasher Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010
Ha-ha-ha-ha-haaaa!!!!
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:iconfireyfreedom:
fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
XD glad you laugh
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:iconkittiasher:
kittiasher Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010
Your fault!!!
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fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I know!
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HackNScript Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2010
Love your author's note. I know exactly how you feel.
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fireyfreedom Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
thanks ^^
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